Your English Homework this week
You are to up- level and improve these sentences. Think about the different ways you can improve them.
Adjectives, punctuation, WOW words and using a different sentence openers.
Re write these sentences below, make sure they make sense.
1.) Jenny watched the old lady as she came closer.
2.) I ran back along my street.
3.) The army stood on the hill.
4.) A storm moved over the forest.
5.) Tim climbed up the wall.
Aleisha Jordinson 4G
ReplyDelete1.) Jenny loitered around and watched the wrinkly but happy old lady.
2.) I ran super quick along my spooky long street.
3.) The brave and strong army stood on the long muddy hill.
4.) A scary loud storm crept over the dark forest which has lots of thick trees in.
5.) Tim quickly but carefully climbed the high wall.
1} Jenny watched very closely, at the frail old lady came closer.
ReplyDelete2} When I heard a big BANG, I ran as fast as I could along my long, narrow street.
3} The army marched to the top of the hill in the village to get a better view of the amusement park.
4} As the powerful storm moved through the thick forest, the trees swayed from side to side and the foxes made howling noises to warn their cubs.
5} Just as Tim scaled the wall he heard his mum shout "AND WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU ARE DOING? " Tim fell to the ground in shock and grazed his knee badly.
1) Pretty Jenny watched with a kind look as a old lady came closer.
ReplyDelete2) I ran so fast along my busy street trying to avoid all the people in my way.
3) The brave army stood on the high hill ,glad the war was over.
4) Suddenly a furious storm moved over the silent forest.
5) Carefully Tim climbed up the rough wall hoping he would not fall.
1.) Jenny watched the old lady when I came closer and closer.
ReplyDelete2.)I dogged to the corner of the street.
3.)the cunning army cradled on the hill ready to shoot us.
4.) A storm flashed over the dark forest.
5.)Tim quickly climbed up the steep wall.
1. Petes cousin Jenny watched the old, but athletic and strong lady, as she ran closer to me.
ReplyDelete2. We pounced forward along my fabulous and clean street.
3. The strong and focused army marched over the dangerous hill.
4. The terrifying storm ran across the forest, blowing down millions of trees- clearing the forest!
5. The adventurous boy called Tim, climbed the massive, steap wall!
jenny watched the old lady, as she came closer.
ReplyDeletemy heart was beating like a cheeta as I ran
Tall, young Jenny stared at the rather small and old lady as the lady walked closer to her.
ReplyDeleteI skipped back along my long, thin and clean street (rod minth street).
1 jenny watched as the ugly old lady come clocer
ReplyDelete2 I quickly ran as fast as I could along my street
3 the army was camaflashed behind the hill
1.Jenny wos watched the old lad as shi cam
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ReplyDelete1.) Jenny watched the slow lady as she came closer.
2.) I ran back along my street.
3.) The army stood on the hill.
4.) A storm moved over the forest.
5.) Tim climbed up the wall.
1.Jenny glared at the strong and
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ReplyDelete1.) Jenny watched the old slim lady as she sprinted closer.
2.) I ran back along my street.
3.) The army stood on the hill.
4.) A storm moved over the forest.
5.) Tim climbed up the wall.
1)Jenny wached to old lady when she came closer.
ReplyDelete2)I usually ran when i come back along my street.
3)did the army stood on the hill.
4)A big storm moved over the forest.
5)Naughty TIM climbd up the wall and falled down.
- 1/Jenny watched closely as the old fat lady came closer.
ReplyDelete2/Iran as quickly as he can along his street .
3/ the army hid camouflage behind the hill
4/ a storm moved from the city to the forest
5/Tim painted the wall
The strong brave army stood on a massive hill.
ReplyDeleteA frightening storm crashed over a forest.
Tim climbed the wall but his mother stopped him.
1. Jenny stared at the mysterious woman as she stepped closer
ReplyDelete2. I glided back towards the village
3. The dangerous army stood on the wet, slippery hill
4. A storm flew over the gloomy forest
5. Tim tried to climb up the hard, enormous wall
1.Jenny glanced at a young strict lady as she walked closer and closer .
ReplyDelete2.I jumped with joy and ran with a happy face .
3.The army sneakily peeped over the hill and charged straight
at their enemies .
over the forest .
4 . A fierceful storm stormed over the gigantic forest .
5. Tim struggled to climbed up a 30 feet wall .
1. Jenny glared , strong and slim lady as she sprinted closer.
ReplyDelete2.I ran across my spooky and clean street.
3.As the army camouflage on the hill , the other army came and attacked them!
4.A terrifying storm dashed across the city to the gigantic forest and destroyed millions of trees!
5.Super Tim climbed over the wall like spider-man!!!